Tuesday, 26 June 2018

My first quality blog post

Anzac  art.

Art .
Find out about the Anzac that went to war.  Did they survive and come back?


Life in a trench As I was moving through the trench into the mud I get stuck. One man came to help me get out and then we sprint back to our trench. my mate takes cover. We grab our guns and run out of the trench. we start to shoot at the enemies. I run to see my mate for some more ammo because I ran out of ammo. He didn't have some but my other mate did. he give me some of his ammo. As i run, i remember that no one was covering me. as i run out of the trench, enemies fired at us. I tried to take cover when my partner covered me. we continued running forward but we both got shot . Impalar Waipara

What i did well?
I read about what some other kids had written about life in the trenches. this made me want to write my own.

4 comments:

  1. Impalar,
    Your writing had me nervously reading to the end to see what happened. What were those trenches like that they were running through? Could you describe them a bit more? At the top of your post your had a space for some Art. It would be great to see it inserted in here. If you need help to do that ask me on Tuesday when I am in class and I will show you how.

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  2. Kia ora, I am Ryan from Ormond School.
    I really liked your Life in a trench writhing Impalar
    I learnt that you have had a church visot
    Maybe you could writhing more nextime
    If you would like to see my learning visit my blog <a href="https://http://thsimpalarw.blogspot.com/”>here</a>

    Mā te wā
    Ryan

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    1. Kia ora ryan thanks for your helpful comment i will visit your blog now

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  3. http://ormondryanb.blogspot.com/

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